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"Complete" by ~Lestat21:iconLestat21:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




Almost,
I Could Taste It For One Night,
Your Lips,
Your Breath On My Body,
Almost,
I Could Touch You,
Unrelenting Passion Through Our Eyes,
Your Fingernails On My Face,
Almost,
I Could Hear The Sound Of Sweat,
My Thoughts Did Not See The Outside World,
You Were All That Mattered,
Almost,
I Could See Myself Again,
Not Alone For Once,
Tainted By A Fantasy,
Yet I Wake,
Cold And Alone,
A Pistol By My Side Instead Of Your Decadent Smile,
In My Dreams You Are There,
And For Always You Get Me Through,
For Those Simple Moments,
I Was Almost,
Complete.

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©2005-2010 ~Lestat21
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Remember The Days When You Almost Felt Complete
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~MortuusAtrum Apr 11, 2005, 1:17:35 AM
this is great! try breaking it down into stanza's though.

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Heres my two cents :twocents:
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~JessyWitch Apr 11, 2005, 4:35:58 AM
That was really beautiful!
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~Toxic-Bubzy Apr 11, 2005, 4:47:48 AM
:cries: PROBABLY ONE OF THE SWEETEST THINGS I'VE READ!!!!

but guess what?! this is really uplifting for me...i have inspiration!!! expect some more work from me and credit to you for inspiring me finally!!

For Those Simple Moments,
I Was Almost,
Complete

you may not have been complete but you were thankful you were almost!! awww very touching kyle!!!

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.Tell Me I'm a Pretty Bullet.
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~Lestat21 Apr 11, 2005, 5:28:33 AM
I Am Glad You Thought The Poetry Was Great, And As Far As Stanzas I Stopped Using That Type Of Poetry A Long Time Ago, It Seems Rather Amature To Me Since The Word Is Trained Through Stanza In Begining Styles Of Poetry, I Learned This Way A While Ago When I Was About 15 (Damn Long Ago :jawdrop:) But Thanks Man For The Input I Hope To See Ya Around When I Write Further.
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~Lestat21 Apr 11, 2005, 5:29:43 AM
Thanks Always Jess. :alone:
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~MortuusAtrum Apr 11, 2005, 5:30:52 AM
yeah, I just didnt see anything else you could change "great poem" just seemed so boring! lol....Great Poem.

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Heres my two cents :twocents:
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~Lestat21 Apr 11, 2005, 5:35:38 AM
No Problem Man Haha! Ill Check Ur Stuff Out As Well. =)
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~MortuusAtrum Apr 11, 2005, 5:36:03 AM
thanks :)

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Heres my two cents :twocents:
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~Lestat21 Apr 11, 2005, 5:41:20 AM
I Am Pleased To Hear That I Inspire You WOW! :jawdrop: Never Thought People Liked My Stuff This Way But Hey. Rachel I Have Always Told You You Were A Great Poet I Just Hope You Stay The Path Is All. I Would Stand To See It Happen Believe That.
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